Poem help….Ideas?

I think your poem says a lot in a few words which is what poetry is all about. If you have more feelings you want to express you could add more, but this poem already offers a complete picture.

There is one thing, though, I would suggest. The meter, or pattern of hard and soft syllables, is not consistent in the way I natrually want to read it. The words and syllables do not flow as evenly as they could, which is distracting. Instead of reading each word naturally, I have this feeling I have to FORCE the flow to be even by re-reading lines in a different way. But, there are some I cannot get into rhythm even by forcing them.

Writing is very personal and I don’t like to invade that space. You did ask for suggestions, but only about adding more to the poem. If you are open to other ideas about smoothing out the meter, you might consider the following revisions that I think help improve the flow of words:

He says that he loves me. But, I’m not so sure.

Hmm, that’s what they all say, but when is it pure?

“Of course I do love you”, my last love once said.

Then, why on the next day my thousand tears shed?

Writing can be good therapy if it helps you get over your pain and sadness.

All the best.

Is it for a class? If it is, does it meet the requirements for the assignment? Also, what mood do you want to create? The way it is, it is very pessimistic about love. It seems to say the author believes there’s no way he could mean what he says. Does the author feel no hope? If you wanted to add more you could add something that shows a glimmer of hope in the author’s thoughts.

He says he loves me but I’m not sure,

That’s what they say, although not pure.

“Of course I love you” my last love said,

But in the day bitter tears I shed.

As far as writing more, what else do you feel?