Grammar check help?

Your grammar is typical of most high school students.. I would rate it at about the 9th grade. Your sentence struture is ok, but it is hard for people to undertand what your sentences mean. Your word choice is ok, but some parts are ‘wordy’, without saying much. I edited it, with word replacement, deletion and structural changes. I hope this is what you wanted this paragraph to say!

2nd sentence – delete “resulting” it is a gerund and incorrectly used. Also, delete one of “the” – you typed it twice.

At the end of sentence 4, delete the period and replace with a semicolon (;).

Dependent is spelled like this.

Thus, (add the comma)

I can only find one grammatical error. ‘Game’, meaning ‘wildlife’ is an uncountable noun, so you must say ‘game’ ( i e without ‘s’) even when you are referring to the plural.

‘Game’ referring to sport is, of course, countable.

There are just a few places where I would use a different form of expression, as opposed to grammatical mistakes.

1. It is unusual to use ‘aided’ in the way that you have done. ‘helped’ is adequate and better, I think.

2. I am sure that on re-reading, you will notice that you have missspelt ‘caps’.

3. ‘turned over to’ (line 5) normally means ‘handed over’. I would use ‘turned to’ as you did on a previous line.

4. Their dependant source of food’ literally means the food was dependant on them (eg like ‘dependant relative). I would say ‘the source of food on which they mainly depended’

I hope this helps..