can anyone check my essay?

Here you go.

Try to avoid unnecessary words, even if you do have a certain number of words to write. Also, avoid repeating yourself. Several phrases appear three or four times.

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In her essay,”This Is Our World,” Dorothy Allison gives many quotes and ideas about art and how it impact us. None of her quotes could be more accurate than one that talks about how we would reveal more about ourselves than the artist by commenting on their work. It is true that when we see, hear, and listen to a piece of art we are actually interpreting it in a way that makes us reveal ourselves and probably the way we had lived? How we interpret a piece of art totally depends on how we see life and how we have being living it.

“We know if we say anything about what we see in a work of art we will reveal more about ourselves than the artist” says that no matter what the artist is trying to say we will always see something different; we will see something that reflects us. In other words, it does not matter what an artist is trying to say or do if the path we have been following is different from the artist’s, we will never agree with him.

When Allison says art, she is not only referring to paintings but to all methods of art from music and writing to photography and poetry. Just as some people claim to interpret paintings, we all interpret all methods of art in individual ways.

This quote by Allison could not be more correct. The ways in which we interpret a piece of art really depends on how we see life and what we think about it. In the way we interpret music, for example, we are actually listening to what we want to hear. When we look at a painting or picture we are looking at a reflection of our state of mind. When we say something we are just describing what we see in ourselves. What we see in a piece of art also depends on how we have lived and what type of experienced we have had throughout our lives. Bad experiences can cause us to see something bad while good experiences can cause us to see things in a very positive way.

Many people might not agree with Allison’s quote but just as music, poetry and photography, writing is art that reflects people’s mind, so you who disagree might be interpreting it in a very different way.

There is a song by British progressive rock band Pink Floyd called “Time” that says, “Tired of lying in the sunshine, staying home to watch the rain” this piece of the song can be interpret differently depending on the person and the person’s history. To someone that never has time to party or never goes out with friends to have fun, these lyrics would look seem to describe his personal history, never having fun and when fun is present, he prefers to go home and do nothing. But to someone who does the opposite, party all the time, these lyrics only talk about sun light and water. In Allison’s essay when she looks at a magazine ad with a father throwing his son into the air and the words “Your father will always catch you”; she looks at this as something bad and horrible. The reason for this interpretation is because she was raped by her step-father when she was a child, so she sees the picture as a reflection of her own childhood. When she read the words, maybe she thought about her step-father trying to catch her and never being able to escape from him. When looking at Edvard Munch’s “Skrik” (often translated as The Scream or The Cry), many people would see totally different things, depending on the people’s background. Someone who has read the poem that goes along with the painting will know the meaning of it, but what about someone who has not?

Allison was correct when she said that we say more about ourselves than about the artist when we comment or critique their art. The way we interpret art depends on how we live, so when we say something about someone else’s art, we are saying more about us than about the artist. People will look, hear, and read something and every response will be rather different, because everybody comes from different backgrounds. Even every day art like magazine advertisements and music will have different impacts on us depending on how we live and what our experiences had been.

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ITz gud eassy i think u will get 8 makrs out of 10..

, comma shld be put where u feel things is not written can make a sense in sentence…like

My friend ,named kayla, is nice.

Now here u can edit this thing “named kayla” even then sentence will make sense won’t it :)???? so itz this way use.

other than this after 1st word use comma…workd like though however n all

also if sentence is too long but commna in betwwen where they fell to be broken 🙂