i just need someone to check this for me and tell me if im right or not…?

well i need to write an essay about macbeth and this is my first time!! the teacher hadn’t taught us much because she gave it to us the day before the holidays!

well this is my introduction and i need some approval or ways to fix it :

Shakespeare’s Macbeth tells a story of the journey of an idol towards his downfall. Macbeth’s surroundings encourage him to transform and eventually, evil takes hold of him. Characterisation, imagery and language all come together to create Macbeth’s character and turn him into the person he is set out to be. The struggle that gets twisted in his mind edges him on to do the worst. Even though Lady Macbeth and the three witches entice him to proceed so far, that it is easier to continue killing that trying to stop, Macbeth himself is to blame for his own breakdown.

thanks!!

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