is there any grammatical error on this paragraph? plz help me.?
“Being different as an immigrant in USA, I was vulnerable to teasing, even though it has made me stronger and wiser person. When I first came to USA, I teased for my English accent. English was not my first language, so my accent was not like native speakers. I was not grown up in this culture, and I had teased for that too. “I don’t want to talk with a Broken English guy.” I have heard those words a few times, even though it really lowered my self-esteem. In my first workplace, I was the only one, who is an immigrant. So sometimes, I felt uneasy to talk with co-workers. Sometime they were talking about a baseball match, or even a new released audio album by a famous American singer, in which I was not familiar. I was not able to celebrate their holidays, and it made me uneasy. Sometimes in absence of me, they were making funny stories about me. Some of my activities seemed funny to them. However, I realized we are all different from each other. I learned that there are more to worry “
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“made me stronger and wiser person.” should be “made me A stronger and wiser person”
” I was not grown up in this culture,” << kinda confusing, maybe "i had not grown up in this culture" "I was the only one, who is an immigrant." should be I was the only one who was an immigrant "Sometime they were talking" << should be sometimes "they were making funny stories about me." should be "they made funny stories about me"
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Being different as an immigrant to the U.S.A., I was vulnerable to teasing, even though it has made me a stronger and wiser person. When I first came to the U.S.A. I was teased for my accent. English was not my first language so my accent was not like that of native speakers. I did not grow up in this culture, and I was teased for that too. “I don’t want to talk with a guy who speaks broken English.” I heard those words a few times. It really lowered my self-esteem. In my first workplace, I was the only immigrant, so sometimes I felt uneasy about talking with coworkers. Sometimes they were talking about a baseball game, or a new CD by an American singer who I was not familiar with. I wasn’t able to celebrate their holidays, which also made me uneasy. Sometimes when I wasn’t there, they made fun of me. Some of the things I did seemed strange to them, however, I realized we are all different from each other. I learned that there are more important things to worry about.
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You use a few words which are not necessary and also link phrases so that they don’t quite convey the meaning correctly. I suggest the following for the first few sentences. (I’m reluctant to do all of it in case you are being tested on your English and if you are going to give this in as a piece of your own work for marking, for example, it would be cheating.) “As an immigrant in the USA, I was vulnerable to teasing. However, this teasing has made me a stronger and wiser person. When I first arrived in the USA, I was teased for my accent. English was not my first language so my accent was different from native speakers. I had not grown up in this culture and I was teased for that reason too.
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Good answers by the other two, but Jeff did forget a comma or two. After U.S.A there should be one and after first language you should have another.
I would also look at splitting the paragraph as it deals with at least two concepts. I would split it at the time you start your first workplace and it certainly should be split where you find the resolution. That is before the ‘however’.
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