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jewella503

Could you please check my English grammar?

The following is a conclusion part of my executive summary.

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At this point, we do not recommend establishing laptops for student program at YUJ due to the high costs for laptops, students’ unwillingness to pay an expensive renting and purchasing costs, and the shortage of technical staffs, and limited space issue. There are still possibilities of this project for the future since YUJ has a plan to build new campus because of the increasing student number.

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Norton N

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Looks fine to me.
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AlisonFox(y)
My recommendation:

“At this point we do not recommend acquiring laptops for student programs at YUJ for several reasons. One, the high cost that leads to high rent/purchasing fees for students. Two, the shortage of technical staff. And three, the limited space issue. There are still possibilities of this project for the future since YUJ has a plan to expand due to an increasing student population.”

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Jeff Mad.
The recommendation above is more grammatically correct but yours will still pass (except in the eyes of English majors).
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mrp_dkc
The grammar is perfect
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