Can you please check any grammatical errors in this sentence?

I would like to know the earliest possible time to receive the final voucher for the LPS Project from Bearing Point. Receiving the final voucher is imperative to carry out the closing process. Also, may I get preliminary information with regards to the estimate for the project expenditure for last month (if I am not mistaken, expenditures from 1 June 2007 to 13 July 2007)? It will give us an idea about the remaining funds for the LPS Project.

I am only 14 but i think it should be like this

Can I get information as to when I will be able to receive final voucher for LPS Project from Bearing Point? If you can send send final voucher immediately, it will make it easier for us to carry out the closing process. If it is possible, can I get preliminary information how much is the estimate for the project expenditure for the latest month (if I am not mistaken, the expenditure per 1 June 2007 to 13 July 2007)? I just want to know if there is remaining fund from the LPS Project.

rephrased, according to my understanding of what you seem to want:

When will i be able to receive the final voucher for LPS Project from Bearing Point? please expedite it so that i can close my accounts early (you can state reason if possible). i would also like to know what the remaining fund from the LPS Project is (if I am not mistaken, the latest expenditure was between 1 June 2007 and 13 July 2007).

short and sharp? 😀